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It is like watching
shooting stars collide into
eachother.
Fire explosions,
that's my heart right now,
a mixture of all kinds
of toxic gases
ready to penetrate
every single cell
of me.
Is it even safe to breathe anymore?

I wish I could breathe you,
because if you were like air,
you'd be the most pure,
and refreshing
air I could ever
inhale.  

I feel the universe
falling down on me
but I can say it's just part
of my way of being,
voices [inside my head] say
I'm always over-
reacting.

And you see,
these words are simple
forward,
non- brilliant
nor breathtaking
not something a real
poet would ever write.
And you see, this is
me again, (again, and again)
lowering my
self-esteem. (I wonder if it could go any lower.)
I lay down on my bed
looking up the roof
thinking if this is ever
going to stop,
[If I am ever going to stop.]

After days in complete
blindness and nights of
freezing 'till feeling
my heart beat in slow motion,
I've come to realize that
I'm only left with non- crafted
metaphors that no one will get
to understand,
they are made from some
broken girl that lives
with the only company
of her twisted mind.

Still she thinks she's worth saving.
:iconbegginermay:
Someone save her please.
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:iconlava-bunni:
~Lava-Bunni Nov 16, 2011  Student General Artist
This is fantastic! Great work! I really liked it.
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:iconbegginermay:
~BegginerMay Nov 16, 2011  Student Artist
Thank you so much!!! I'm so glad you liked it :heart:
and thanks a bunch for the fave too :3
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:iconlava-bunni:
~Lava-Bunni Nov 17, 2011  Student General Artist
No problem :)
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:iconredheadedbitch:
Absolutely LOVE this!! The metaphors are amazing, and the contrast between her mind and her thoughts is great.
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:iconbegginermay:
~BegginerMay Nov 16, 2011  Student Artist
Thank you very much, I'm so glad you liked it! :D :heart:
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:iconilovekurosakitasuku:
!ilovekurosakitasuku Nov 14, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
your work is amazing :icontardglompplz:
i would save her...
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:iconbegginermay:
~BegginerMay Nov 14, 2011  Student Artist
:blushes:
thank you so much!! <3
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:iconwrite4me:
~Write4Me Nov 13, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
From "And you see, this words are simple forward, " up it's good, but from there to the end it's absolutely amazing. Beautiful work, as usual (:
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:iconbegginermay:
~BegginerMay Nov 13, 2011  Student Artist
Thank you<3
and for the fave too.
<3<3
words can't express how much you mean to me :)
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:iconwrite4me:
~Write4Me Nov 14, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
And words have finally failed you <3 haha
I love you, thank you for everything yesterday and today and every single day this year. (: :hug:
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